Women’s values in today’s society are influenced by media, which is powerful and tremendous. Most women often become obsessed with becoming the same person they see on television, billboards, and in magazines. The reason is because every day more than ten programs shown on TV introduce and publicize the beauty, makeup products, weight-losing advertisements and ways of keeping slimness and fitness, etc. Therefore, in the sample of TV commercial, they show 87% of women in the commercial is young and beautiful and 90.7% of women have slender body shapes. The commercials, advertisements and magazines always over-emphasize perfect standard of female, thus this has huge effects on women’s life and some women start to have high standard of being flawless.
posted by 海倫 at Tuesday, March 20, 2007
2 Comments:
Hi~Here are my responses
1)you need to give citation for the statistical number you put in the introduction paragraph
2)I think it will be better to show the major reasons (how women's lives are influenced) to make your thesis more convincing
Add oil~~
Dear Helen,
As Gwyneth pointed out, you need citations for any sources you adopted in your paper.
Also, I think you need find more papers related to your topic to make your introduction more convincing.
Finally, don't forget your weblog activity #2 and #3.
Good luck!
Grace
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